I analyzed "today's technology", she had a very strong introduction with a very clear thesis, but she was not specific. She always followed with her thesis which is something that will be very helpful when I write my own argument essay. However, she has a lot of good evidence but she needs expand it a little more. One of her paragraphs talks about how we encounter people using portable devices everywhere we go, which I believe that's not so relevant. I think that fits better in her introduction rather than just writing it as "evidence". This is very helpful when writing my paper by being more organized and stick with my thesis argument. She also has good evidence, which connects to her thesis in a way that is very convincing. Also, she lacks considering other positions where another person can appose and weaken your argument. This taught me that in order to keep my paper strong I need to carefully acknowledge other views.