My goals throughout the semester were to be able to improve in being able to elaborate on my ideas and be more organized. Throughout this semester I have improved a lot on that aspect. What has really helped me develop as a writer was the peer reviewing we did in class. Peer reviewing was very helpful because i was able to see the progress that my classmates had done and also get ideas based on their work. This helped me a lot to be able to expand my ideas because took their essays as examples and I applied their methods to my papers. Also, the assigned readings were very helpful. It was great to be able to read an example from a professional writer and taking notes out of the book, it has very helpful information and tips. I still need to work a lit in order to become a better writer and what my plan is to practice my writing more and take English 102. I feel like my biggest weakness is still my punctuation, In every essay i get back i get comments and I still need to improve.

For my portfolio i decided to revise my pepsi light ad analysis essay. I feel like the strengths of my paper ware that i made sure the reader had a clear vision of the ad without providing the photograph. Another aspect of my essay that I feel that I did a good job in was in analyzing the ad.

What i feel less confident about is about connecting my thesis to the rest of the paper and then organizing it. Also, my word choice.
I will apply this to improving my paper for my portfolio. I will make sure that all my evidence connects to my thesis and that i don't get out of topic. I will definitely keep my analysis that I did thought my old paper.

I analyzed "today's technology", she had a very strong introduction with a very clear thesis, but she was not specific. She always followed with her thesis which is something that will be very helpful when I write my own argument essay. However, she has a lot of good evidence but she needs expand it a little more. One of her paragraphs talks about how we encounter people using portable devices everywhere we go, which I believe that's not so relevant. I think that fits better in her introduction rather than just writing it as "evidence". This is very helpful when writing my paper by being more organized and stick with my thesis argument. She also has good evidence, which connects to her thesis in a way that is very convincing. Also, she lacks considering other positions where another person can appose and weaken your argument. This taught me that in order to keep my paper strong I need to carefully acknowledge other views.

Ethos logos pathos

-Logos
•fairness
•everyone should be able to have the same opportunities.
•society needs more educated people.
•school is expensive.

-pathos
•most undocumented students are not allowed to work. Therefore, paying for college is very difficult.
•undocumented students tend to set lower standards for themselves.

-ethos
•undocumented students who are receiving money from the government tend to work harder rather than those who have the benefits.

My weakest evidence is that everyone should be able to have the same opportunities. I feel like it will be very difficult for me to prove this. This argument this be difficult because people might argue that there are also people who are not undocumented that do not get financial aid and they still go to college and find ways to go to school. The way I can support this argument is by explaining that undocumented people are also not allowed to work.

My strongest point is that students who are undocumented tend to set lower standards for themselves. They think that it's impossible to go to college so they just work and forget about school. I have noticed that students who are undocumented try very hard, and get good grades. People who receive the help, take it for granted and don't care about doing well in their classes because either way they are getting paid for.